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Baggage Reclaim. by ~Emotionally-Executed:iconEmotionally-Executed:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Mature Romance > Open


Doesn’t it make you sad?


Sprawled across the table, I was
                  my chest cavity a gaping mouth
                        meant only for consuming flies and sorrow


                        you left me there to rot.


Tell me of how sorry your scalpel was
       as it made incisions so that you could roll back my flesh
      to show me how naked I really am


Tell me if your sledgehammer cried
       as it parted my skull, my indiscretions spilling out
            ruining your impeccable shoes


Do you ever tire of cleaning up such messes
      pushing scraps of insignificance down the putrid rabbit hole
                    into the gullet of death?


Doesn’t it make you sad?




So, so sad?
©2009 ~Emotionally-Executed
:iconemotionally-executed:

Author's Comments

Stop trying to make it better, Love.




The damage has been done, and I'm not the same anymore.

Comments


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Mood: Love ~ClaudiaCasanova Jul 29, 2009, 11:58:01 PM
...I love your talent.

God, help me, your poetry is so exqusite!

--
To be or not to be?

meh, lets just eat some pancakes and call it a day.

Clubs: *RawEm0tion ~PoeticPeace ~PoeticPath ~da-library ~Writers-Guild-DA *degrees-of-love *WordCount *LiteraryUnderground
:iconxbarelyxbreathingx:
Mood: Love ~xbarelyxbreathingx Jul 30, 2009, 12:25:18 PM
........

I'm speechless.

This is so amazing! I love it!

--
hey little apple blossom
what seems to be the problem
all the ones you tell your troubles to
they don't really care for you
:icontheconsciouscasanova:
~theconsciouscasanova Jul 30, 2009, 2:46:05 PM
beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!
:iconemotionally-executed:
~Emotionally-Executed Jul 30, 2009, 8:50:16 PM
Your comments are the really the best an artist could read. :)

Thank you very much.

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Join! ~deutsch

Bis dann.
Ich werde warten.
:iconemotionally-executed:
~Emotionally-Executed Jul 30, 2009, 8:52:23 PM
Thank you very much!

I was a little uneasy posting it because I didn't think it was that good, but you changed my mind. :)

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Join! ~deutsch

Bis dann.
Ich werde warten.
:iconemotionally-executed:
~Emotionally-Executed Jul 30, 2009, 8:53:07 PM
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

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Join! ~deutsch

Bis dann.
Ich werde warten.
:iconthetaoofchaos:
*thetaoofchaos Jul 31, 2009, 8:31:03 AM
though an oft-repeated theme, your version has some potency to it. i like the way you've given personality to the symbolic objects of your emotive demise.

--
The world is an eraser for these words


- Jack Kerouac


we must destroy that which contains us
:iconxbarelyxbreathingx:
~xbarelyxbreathingx Jul 31, 2009, 11:36:29 AM
I'm glad I changed your mind! I really loved it.

When I liked this one boy Logan, I always felt like I was baggage to him. Something that he only kept around for emergences, but not because he wanted to. So when I saw the title of this poem I was like "i HAVE to check this out!!" :D

--
hey little apple blossom
what seems to be the problem
all the ones you tell your troubles to
they don't really care for you
:iconwithered-frozen-lips:
~withered-frozen-lips Aug 2, 2009, 11:35:45 PM
I really like this! Your word play is as incredible as ever.

--
While some people make love,
others expect rain.
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